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Arsenic

Tides crashing
People clashing
Falling skies

Nick of blades
Turn of new graves
A lover's cry

Chalk and death
Toxic breath
Air, too dry

Cold and damp
Claustro-cramped
Poisoned alive

Frozen
Colour reference for Arsenic: [link]
Colour 5, halfway down the page.

This poem was done for =SilverInkblot's Colour Poem Contest, found here. [link]

Taken from the description on this page: The colour arsenic is based around the element arsenic which is a dark grey-blue colour.

Keeping this is mind, for the 2,3,4 lines. I thought of stomy waves, people fighting, and the sky when the weather is in turmoil.

Arsenic is a metalloid that is often naturall found.
Lines 5,6,7 - Clashing of steel blades, the chink of a shovel when digging a grave, and the agony in the cry of a lover who's lost their mate.

When people buy arsenic poison to kill rats, it's typically a white powder.
Lines 8,9,10 - I used chalky to refer to the powdery state we typically find arsenic in, as well as how powders and such dry out your skin and the air. Death/toxic because you know. Poison and all.

It's in one's best interest to avoid exposure to/ingestion of arsenic, with its lethal effects.
Lines 11,12,13 - Dead bodies are ice cold, void of any heat and then cramped into boxes and packed under six feet of Earth.

Line 14 - Sum it up.


Written October 3, 2012
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Mooyi Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Student Writer
This poem really rolled on my tongue! Enjoyed it very much.
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your take on the form was very interesting - it's deceptively simple. The subtle rhymes are a nice touch and add a little rhythm to make up for how brief it is. I got it well enough before the author comments, but I like that you offered that extra dimension of readers to plunge into. And arsenic certainly isn't a color I ever would have thought to use :XD:
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ToxicAlice92 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Professional Photographer
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012   General Artist
Very deep and emotive. I love the structure and the intense imagery.
The line breaks are well done and the flow is good. :nod:

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ToxicAlice92 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Professional Photographer
Structure an general idea is all thanks to =SilverInkblot. It was for their contest, after all! I thought it was a really strong structure, personally. I'm not a huge poet or writer or anything, so I'm not quite sure what my opinion means, but it was popular enough for her to do a contest centred around it!
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012   General Artist
:nod: Ah I see

That's pretty awesome.
It is indeed.

:hug:

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shadow-hobo07 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
okay that is pretty darn epic!
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ToxicAlice92 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Professional Photographer
Oh, thank you! :O
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shadow-hobo07 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome ^^
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